short story twisting ending?

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Braden J

I have to write a short story about a character that we had to make up with 8 character traits i chose Brave Independent Mischievous Daring Dreamer Calm Bold Determined, but i can not think of a ending. here is what i have so far. note this is a rough draft i havent gone through spelling and grammar. Thanks!

It was a hot summers day, the sun was beating heavily down upon the scorched bleachers, fresh air overwhelmed by hot dogs, beer, and carbon monoxide, it was the year of 1975, Sunday, a father and son day for my dad and I, a day I will never forget. The crowd anticipated the big Daytona 500 race to being, the roaring engines make it understandable why today the big race day is the most exciting times of the year. The art of racing was new to me but I was hooked âWhen I'm grown up, I wanna be a racecar driver. I wanna get into one of them cars an' go really fast.â I have repeat those words for years, wished upon every star. If it my wishes didnât come true I would make it come true.

15 years later, Iâm stuck at a dead end job, a sales person at a local dealership barely making ends meet, dreading each and everyday, my dreams are dead. Itâs a typical morning, the dew fresh on the ground, the sun rising over the horizon, people are walking zombies until they get their daily caffeine fix. I was in my 1999 Nissan Skyline Gtr R34, my last hope of going fast in this world equipped with a high performance 500hp engine and a shot of NOZ it was truly all that and a bag of chips. It was a straight stretch, quarter mile away from my work I creped up to a red light, a young kid in a Nissan 370z pulled up next to me revving his engine, he doesnât know what he is up against as I chuckled quietly to myself, I revved my engine back it purred like a kitten with my new H pipe exhaust, to signal the race was on.

I sat back in my seat waiting for the light to change, it felt like two life times, the light triggered green, beep, beep ,beep, my radar detector went crazy, a cop right near me. It was to late, I took off like a rocket, the cop quickly caught on, we were racing. The cop flicked on his siren and the chase was on My heart beating out of my chest, I guess I wonât be going to work this morning. I slammed the gas pedal to the floor, I was going so fast I couldnât see the other cars just blurs passing by, clearly I won the race but there was a bigger picture in my mind, the police. No matter what I knew I couldn't stop running. I had no idea where I was running to, or where I would end up I just had to lose the police.

âWe have a 10-44 in progress, these guys are good requesting back upâ, blared over the radio, I was in over my head in trouble all because of a dream to go fast. Everything was in slow motion I glanced into my rear view mirror, it was filled with red and blue lights, there had to be at least 20 police cars behind us, I looked over to my right, my opponent had a face filled with Concentration and desperation. We were weaving in and out of the morning rush traffic avoiding accidents by inches. My tires squealed as a pulled up on my e brake to make a sharp turn, the radio blared once again âthe racers are breaking up stay on your vehicle repeat stay on your vehicleâ

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It depends on how short you want your story to be. If you want it to be shorter, you can have the main protagonist crash and wake up in the hospital, with the last thought or line being something like " No matter how hard you try, you can't run away from your life".
Or, if you want your story to be longer you could have the main protagonist get away from the cops and dream about that one time that he went against the flow and did something daring (i.e. the race).

does anybody knows what is 'msa gas'?

Jimlberto

http://www.multigasdetection.com/?gclid=CK6NrardpJYCFQECGgodpEta5g

in this link, I was reading the last paragraph and collided with this :
"Some of the Gases Detected by some of the above detectors include
Ammonia gas , Carbon Dioxide , Carbon Monoxide , Chlorine Dioxide , Chlorine , Combustible gas detection, Fluoride , Fluorine Hydrogen , Hydrogen Chloride , Hydrogen Cyanide , Methane , Nitrogen Dioxide , Oxygen detetector, Phosphine , Sulfur Dioxide , carbon monoxide, helium, hydrocarbon, hydrogen gas , methane , msa gas ,monoxide, propane , radon gas. "

there it says. ", msa gas,"

I've searched 'msa gas' and only found a company that makes masks and detectors, but nothing about a "msa gas"

does it ring any bell to somebody?
oops, i put 'knows', It should have been 'know', sorry
ah, ok, I supposed that, somehow, but 'surely' , I was not sure, he he

thanks for your time folks

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It is likely that this vendor doesn't have a chemist on staff reviewing what the sales department puts on the website -- it becomes really obvious when I see things like "fluorine hydrogen", and carbon monoxide three times.

In all likelihood, the folks in the RKI sales office are using the term "msa gas" to describe Mine Safety Appliances' Calibration gas for multi-gas detectors.

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